Mark, I’m not sure how to give feedback on your statement. It’s not reading as a statement yet. There’s a lot of HOW you make work, which loses your reader in the techinicalities.

I am yearning for more WHY you make art.

I want you to write something that makes me want to look at your work right away.

I urge you to study some of the other statements for inspiration. And then, yes, that’s right, start writing again. You can do this! You’re not that far off! But I believe it can be better.